I like the evidence you used.I also like how you gave multiple reasonsI think you could improve on speaking in a more clear voice
I like how you asked us a question like can you relate to this which really hooks the reader in your intro.But something you can change is, you said your claim allot in paragraphs you didn'tneed to.
I like how you gave proof and various reasons on why your claim fit. I think in the beginning, you should hook the reader.
I like how you had your supports in chronical order.You kept repeating the same point 3 times.
maybe you can talk more clear?? I like your intro though
I like that you gave a lot of reason and that you where clear in what you wanted us to now maybe add more detail
I like how you asked us a question that you can you relate to.
You had lots of great examples and evidence t support your claim. Where was your conclusion?
I like the evidence you used.
ReplyDeleteI also like how you gave multiple reasons
I think you could improve on speaking in a more clear voice
I like how you asked us a question like can you relate to this which really hooks the reader in your intro.
ReplyDeleteBut something you can change is, you said your claim allot in paragraphs you didn't
need to.
I like how you gave proof and various reasons on why your claim fit. I think in the beginning, you should hook the reader.
ReplyDeleteI like how you had your supports in chronical order.
ReplyDeleteYou kept repeating the same point 3 times.
maybe you can talk more clear?? I like your intro though
ReplyDeleteI like that you gave a lot of reason and that you where clear in what you wanted us to now maybe add more detail
ReplyDeleteI like how you asked us a question that you can you relate to.
ReplyDeleteYou had lots of great examples and evidence t support your claim. Where was your conclusion?
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